“Sometimes, if a poem feels bulky or leaden, the problem lies in the connectives, passive constructions, surplus adjectives, or words that lack energy or sizzle. Roethke said that one of the tests of the poem was to judge every line as if it were a poem itself.” – From The Rhythm Method, Razzmatazz, and Memory, by Keith Flynn.
Throw out the clichés. Distich the adverbs and, instead, go for active verbs, banish most of your adjectives and find expressive concrete nouns. Use active, not passive, voice.